Monday, June 22, 2009

A full stop must be placed where it is due


I have noted the following news in brief having been highlighted on its front page by a popular national English daily:-

The 64th birthday of Myanmar's democracy icon, Aung San Suu Kyi, was marked by people around the world with birthday cakes, demonstrations and good deeds. British Prime Minister Gordon Brown, Beatles legend Paul McCartney and US actors George Clooney and Julia Roberts offered support while in Malaysia, activist Datin Paduka Marina Mahathir and actor Harith Iskandar joined an event to mark the birthday.

Readers will very likely be led to understand that those people who offered support did so while in Malaysia; but this is not the case according to the news proper.

A recast (as follows) appears necessary to bring the news in brief to be in line with its news proper.

The 64th birthday of Myanmar's democracy icon, Aung San Suu Kyi, was marked by people around the world with birthday cakes, demonstrations and good deeds. British Prime Minister Gordon Brown, Beatles legend Paul McCartney and US actors George Clooney and Julia Roberts offered support. While in Malaysia, activist Datin Paduka Marina Mahathir and actor Harith Iskandar joined an event to mark the birthday.

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