Wednesday, February 6, 2008

Queen Charming - judged vs judging



The following message appeared on 17 July 2006 below the headline, Queen Charming, beside a photograph (showing the winner, first runner-up and second runner-up of Miss Malaysia Intercontinental) on front page of The Star METRO (NORTH) within the issue of 17 July 2006 of THE STAR:-

Winner Tracy Lim, flanked by first runner-up Jervenne Cheah (left) and second runner-up Diana Teh are as charming as they come, judging by the way they captivate both audience and the jury in the Miss Malaysia Intercontinental state finals in Penang.

After sensing that the sentence of the above message could be improved, I wrote on the same day of 17 July 2006 as follows to The Editor of The Star’s Mind our English without receiving any response:-

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I refer to the message below Queen Charming on front page of The Star METRO (NORTH) of July 17.
In order for the presentation to be grammatically sound, the message has to be re-written in any of the followiing 3 ways namely:-

A) Winner Tracy Lim, flanked by first runner-up Jervenne Cheah (left) and second runner-up
Diana Teh are as charming as they come, judged by the way they captivate both audience
and the jury in the Miss Malaysia Intercontinental state finals in Penang or

B) Winner Tracy Lim, flanked by first runner-up Jervenne Cheah (left) and second runner-up
Diana Teh are as charming as they come, and they are judged by the way they captivate
both audience and the jury in the Miss Malaysia Intercontinental state finals in Penang or

C) Winner Tracy Lim, flanked by first runner-up Jervenne Cheah (left) and second runner-up
Diana Teh are as charming as they come, and the judging is done by the way they captivate
both audience and the jury in the Miss Malaysia Intercontinental state finals in Penang.

Kengt, Penang

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