Unwanted comma and word causing problem

After reading the report on a company in THE STAR (STARBIZ) of July 22, 2006, I wrote my comments on its second paragraph and the last one to The Editor of The Star's Mind our English on July 23, 2006 without receiving any response. My such comments are reproduced below:-

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The report's second paragraph reads,

"The diversified pharmaceutical company, which manufactures about 300 healthcare products, now produces about 10%, or 30 ethical drugs in India"

and in its last,

"For the nine months ended March 31, the company posted 48% rise in net profit to RM11mil from RM7.4mil in the previous corresponding period. Its revenue increased 38% to RM102mil from RM74.6mil before."

The comma (,) after "about 10%" in the second paragraph is redundant and should be removed to make the paragraph more easily comprehisible while the context of the last paragraph is clear enough to do away with the last word before which has a doubtful grammatical function there.


Kengt, Penang

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